Revision of a song text (POP)

Revision of a song text (POP)

I am looking for someone who can thoroughly revise an existing text. The current text is not yet good. It is not convincing - but it has good parts. The content of the text should be about the search for knowledge. The journey as a metaphor for the acquisition of knowledge. Where do we end up, where does the journey end - what happens when we have all the knowledge. Some sensual images are already included in the text. But the text still seems unfinished. I like the language in pictures and no hackneyed text phrases.
Write to me, also for other Songprojects!

here are the lyrics:
sendstuff.eu/0C7OA

Rabbit1

will be a pop version
  • Rabbit1
  • Rabbit2